The same four with another girl.
Yeah, those 3/4 faces are god awful.

I like it a lot

Anatomical correctness, eh?
................
THIS IS MANGAAAAAAAAAAA!!!

>>5323
you should have noticed it first before asking any anatomical correctness because there is noting wrong about your drawing

I do remember you from 4chan, if my haunch is correct, you troll around the /ic/ boards, how come you don't post your drawings there for critics?

Yes, I tend to agree with ^^^^
On the first picture I have more trouble with the 4/4 faces than the 3/4's.
Apart from that they have unique appearance that also is appealing(minus flaws), and as much as you can tell from one picture alone, they have character also.
What else can I tell you? Not much about the colors; sparse shading is obviously your approach here, as is washed colors, little contrast. It holds as style.

Second picture, 3/4 faces are not half as bad as the 4/4 faces in picture #1.

Doubt you spent devastating bouts of time on either of these... Anyway, I'd like to see more of your work.

they grew so much.

>>5457
This pleases me.

Hey guys, I'm back.
Meet Neglect-chan

and now the complete opposite

>>6000

I'd have me some neglect-chan personally. How about she grow longer hair and put on some glasses?

>>6002
I can't have that.. there's already a glasses girl

>>6003
Actually a lot of girls have glasses, one more wouldn't be wierd. Just give her a different looking pair?

>>6000
lemme guess, these are the originals, and >>5323 just ripped it off for his own?

>>6005
lol, r u dense?

>>6005
facepalms
Also, great artwork!

Neglect-chan i love you

>>6002
She wouldn't be neglected if she had glasses, would she?

>>6026
The very fact that she's reject-chan gives her votes here, this is the rejects refuge on the internet. Indeed, she could pretty much be the mascot of this board, with or without glasses.
btw, it's mostly rejects who think glasses and such shit is hot.

>>5323
Do you visit /i/ on 4chan? I recognise your style.

>>6029
Yeah, he goes on 4chan /i/. Not as much as i'd like him to though -_-"

Does he have a devart? I'd like to know what it is, if he has.

>>6035
I guess perhaps there's still some trace of sanity in this persons mind, it might be due to this

The characters are planned out now:
http://community.livejournal.com/danshikinshi/9488.html

>>6038
Oh cool, bitch is making a game. Tell me, will this be primarily a dating game or will it have its emphasis on porn?
Will it be open end, multiple path?
Will it be; play that one guy, get any girl, or will the choice of player character be open, i.e. decide your character, appearance, goods and bads?
Will characters and player character develop under gameplay based on choices?

Will it be generic as fuck and thus suck massive cocks?
So far the characters seem typical enough. How I would love some ingenuity. Why are there never ordinary looking girls too? lol, it would be awesome to have 'the ugly fat chick who has an annoying crush on you'. Why is she never in these games, it would add contrast and flavour.

Still, I think this is awesome nonetheless, great initiative, hope you'll be able to finish it.

I'd like to offer some crits;
You should make the feet a bit bigger, at least while they're wearing shoes, to give a more balanced impression. Also practice drawing legs at dynamic angles, that last sketch is weak, mainly due to the legs and feets, and the hands of the right side girl are quirky as hell. You should seriously change these things if you're planning on using that sketch.

>>6039
thanks for the useful crit anon.

It won't be a straight forward fucking game. Your personality will develop as the game progresses, although in the end, you'll probably end up fucking one (or more?) of the girls.

I'm playing several dating sims nowadays to get a feel for what's been overdone and what could be included.

>>6040
Please make it a lot about everyday life too, like you put in time for studies and part-time job, you get to decide how to plan your time and that will affect the outcome and the oppertunities you get. Add a lot of dead ends and back roads in character interaction, and choices that might drastically change your relationship to certain characters. Don't make it to easy to get close to characters, there should be a lot of potential for fail, as well as the potential to push that very special button that makes everything very easy. In short make the game at large and character interaction a bit more dynamic. It makes for a much more interesting experience, and the game itself more replayable.

Also one thing I think you should add, is interactive sex. Like you get to decide how and perhaps also where you do it, and the actual act would be like a mini-game in itself, where you'd have to worry about making the girl feel good while holding yourself back.
Alternative outcomes here that could affect the game would be fucking awesome.

And something I feel is missing, after having played a lot of these games, is the prospect of actually continuing to date a girl after you've actually nailed her. Having to work it out and keep her happy and basically just trying to keep her. Or ditch her if you don't like her, etc.

Big chunk to chew in on, especially if this is your first game project I'm sure, but wouldn't it be awesome with a game like that? Ofcourse it would.

It's nice to see you making a schoolgirl-based VN without weeaboo japanese names.