Were you going for a white or asian shinji...because i think most people draw him white

well, i used the cover of volume 2 or 3 of the manga for reference

He looks white. The mouth is wonky, the hair looks boring, like he washed it with some cheap ass schampoo without using conditioner, and from the sight of it, I believe he slept with his headgear on. The left piece has sort of, wandered from the side of his head, unto his forehead.
I suppose also his neck is very long.

Nice try thought.

>>5218 dude, this is shinji were talking about

I like the detail in this except the shading looks a little off. I think the nose looks like it should be a little lighter.

>>5259
i think the nose looks fine
he almost looks like a really pimply red nosed teenager

Shinja = Japanese

>>6036
they arent free from that fate either
ive seen plenty of pimply faced japanese boys at my school during its 1 week exchange thing

Try to give his eyes more expression, I'm not too sure what they're trying to convey here.

I hope you do more pictures like this...

>>6063
If I find time to work on more then I shall try.
I had a week off work away from home and had plently of time to draw. This was just a re-draw of a picture I drew 4 years ago... Except this one looks a hell of a lot better as I aimed to correct the errors from before (i.e. her head isn't waaaay to big).
I also did this one as a re-draw of an old image. Original character, not Eclair though ^^;;
It still doesn't look right, but again it's better then the original.

I saw >>5672 mentioned about cell-shading and for the past 3 days i've been working with photoshop to learn that technique and finally..(I guess) this is the result.. Nah,im still new at this and you can see a few mistakes that i barely being lazy to fix it.. >>6593 hey,i'm not good at this.. Screw Yuki? ;_;

>>5944 err.. Do you mean, this? Aww I never draw bondage before :(

>>5946
The biggest flaw in this is the palette and its contrasts. The hair just doesn't HAVE shadows, whereas the skin's shadows are barely visible and the jacket has hard contrast. You should try to balance it a little more. If you find this difficult, you can try making a layer with palette colours, duplicating it and moving it next to the original layer, and adjusting its darkness/lightness and things like that. By this, you should get at least a little more balanced look.

>>5953 so,do you mean the problem is colour eh?(I think the anatomy looks awkward) :) by the way thanks for the critics,I'll make effort on it

>>5954
Well I thought I should mostly critique the colouring since you said you don't know how to use PS.

As for the anatomy, I think the most problems are with the head. Its posture is a little stiff and weird and makes me wonder why it's like that, though, I think it looks pretty cute anyway. I think the top of her head is a little too low and too flat and her chin should be pulled to right a bit when we look at her mouth's position. The upper palm seems a bit too big as well.

They're cute nonetheless, you just need more practice with Photoshop and a few anatomical fixes. Keep up the good work!

>>5949
Actually, I meant tied down to the knees, but the fact that you did it, is great enough. Seriously, my upmost thanks.

You should add Haruhi/Mikuru to the picture while you're at it.

Greetings~ here is another,if possible just leave comments about anatomy and colouring.. Btw can anyone teach me how to create a nice highlighter especially on head? Mine sucks (look at it) ;_;

>>6060
Err, I think the contrast is still off. The shadows of her shirt's black part are clearly visible and hard, whereas the skin's and the shirt's white parts' shadows are well, barely visible. You should make those overly light shadows darker.

>>6061 well,thanks for the critics,maybe all I have to do is adjusting my pc monitor before doing colouring.. oh btw,I don't think I drew skirt so,'she' is actually boy :D

yepp, cant see shit.

huge head.

Head too big.
Shoulder/hip ratio plain wrong.

I like this,

I like sketches that are black and white

any more of the bottom set (your character per say)

This one's inking isn't the best, and the arms and shoulders are messed up.

Foreshortening is really cool and adds depth, but if it's not dynamic it's kind of boring like this.

Now, this one's more dynamic. ;)

This is kind of my dream girl. Long hair, A cup breasts, and wide hips.

Inking is shoddy in this one. Kind of quick sketch.

I'm glad I've gotten some positive remarks for once. :)

This set has kind of been an experiment. I don't know how Japanese manga artist do it, but I've been trying out an American method. I've been making large drawings and then reducing the size of the final product (by using photoshop). This allows me to make my inking nicer and then once the size is reduced any messy inking is all but unnoticeable.

Anyways, this is the last set I'll do for awhile. Mainly just experimenting.

Any comments and critiques are welcome. Heck, I'd even take some anatomy ones.

>>6046 "Heck, I'd even take some anatomy ones."
Gee, what are you doing on a crit board if youre not ready take critism?

Anyways.
There's still lot of work here. Mostly anatomy issues/body structure, perspective and foreshortening.
Most of these drawings look like they're drawn without any pose reference, therefore they got some issues.

>>6044
As example, the pose looks really awkward. Theres aswell many lines that just shouldnt be there, or I cant find a reason for them, like the legs and that "buttcrack" thats trying to escape her bottom. What is it?
The hair looks like a white, wet dog that's been beated to death and slapped on her head as a wig.

Her other arm looks like an amputee stump, heck... both of them looks like that.
Left one needs to stand more out from her torso, and the right one needs something that shows that it doesnt end that abruptly.

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>>6044 Lol, that one was pretty crappy.

I've studied anatomy quite extensively the past two years, but I do screw up without looking at an anatomy book or a sketch I've done from life, which I didn't do for any of these.

Of course you're right on all accounts.

Any suggestions for hair? I have always had trouble drawing that.

>>6048
Study hairflow and think that you are drawing strands of hair, not big bunches.
Hair differs very much depending on the person, so it might be a bit hard to say how hair should look like.

<-Lol, MSPaint.

>>6048
One thing I kinda like is that you've not been so very afraid of taking on hard angles and all that. And I can sense there's some inherent strenght in your artistic vision, even though none of these pictures are particularly good. It's just small things you notice.

I suggest you keep at it, because I think you could develop well. You just need to give it much more time.
And by that I don't mean; spend another 5 years drawing the way you do now. I mean, take more of your spare-time to draw.
Talent here is an incredible asset. If you become good enough you could make a living. It will always be a rewarding thing to fall back to when you need to vent yourself. People will admire your talent if you're into that shit...
lol srsly tho' who isn't?

Not to mention a strong artistic talent does help you to mentally become stronger in other areas. Anything that excercises your brain makes you smarter.

Just saying; draw more

>>6050 That's good advice. The thing is that I'm an artist in more of a traditional since, with charcoal, paint, and all that jazz. Being a university student in fine art, I've quickly learned that this kind of illustration is swept under the rug and thought of as a bad dream that doesn't exist. That said I don't have a lot of time to draw this kind of stuff, but I do when I can.

Actually, if I had to pick one of these pictures as the best, I would pick the first one I posted, >>5947 , because it is the most aesthetically sound work I've posted here.

>>6051

>>I've quickly learned that this kind of illustration is swept under the rug and thought of as a bad dream that doesn't exist.

Stick that in their fucking faces, they are cunts.
Know what that is? They are ignorant. They wanna feel remarkable by complicating this trade even while there are easier/cheaper alternatives.
Working on the computer is less exclusive, less of a bother, cheaper, cleaner. They might wanna think half of what is art is the pain of pushing your ideas out through the limitations of traditional medium.
Well, they are fucking idiots.
A true artist cares not a shit about how he accomplishes his works, but that he can make them as close to his vision as possible.
I bet if for example Leonardo Da Vinci lived in our time, he would make cg-art.

Not to mention most of these snotty shits don't know half a fuck about the process of creating original cg-art. They think the computer does 90% of the job, and that everything is about fancy program functions generating everything while you can kick back and kneed your cock.

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>>6002
She wouldn't be neglected if she had glasses, would she?

>>6026
The very fact that she's reject-chan gives her votes here, this is the rejects refuge on the internet. Indeed, she could pretty much be the mascot of this board, with or without glasses.
btw, it's mostly rejects who think glasses and such shit is hot.

>>5323
Do you visit /i/ on 4chan? I recognise your style.

>>6029
Yeah, he goes on 4chan /i/. Not as much as i'd like him to though -_-"

Does he have a devart? I'd like to know what it is, if he has.

>>6035
I guess perhaps there's still some trace of sanity in this persons mind, it might be due to this

The characters are planned out now:
http://community.livejournal.com/danshikinshi/9488.html

>>6038
Oh cool, bitch is making a game. Tell me, will this be primarily a dating game or will it have its emphasis on porn?
Will it be open end, multiple path?
Will it be; play that one guy, get any girl, or will the choice of player character be open, i.e. decide your character, appearance, goods and bads?
Will characters and player character develop under gameplay based on choices?

Will it be generic as fuck and thus suck massive cocks?
So far the characters seem typical enough. How I would love some ingenuity. Why are there never ordinary looking girls too? lol, it would be awesome to have 'the ugly fat chick who has an annoying crush on you'. Why is she never in these games, it would add contrast and flavour.

Still, I think this is awesome nonetheless, great initiative, hope you'll be able to finish it.

I'd like to offer some crits;
You should make the feet a bit bigger, at least while they're wearing shoes, to give a more balanced impression. Also practice drawing legs at dynamic angles, that last sketch is weak, mainly due to the legs and feets, and the hands of the right side girl are quirky as hell. You should seriously change these things if you're planning on using that sketch.

>>6039
thanks for the useful crit anon.

It won't be a straight forward fucking game. Your personality will develop as the game progresses, although in the end, you'll probably end up fucking one (or more?) of the girls.

I'm playing several dating sims nowadays to get a feel for what's been overdone and what could be included.

>>6040
Please make it a lot about everyday life too, like you put in time for studies and part-time job, you get to decide how to plan your time and that will affect the outcome and the oppertunities you get. Add a lot of dead ends and back roads in character interaction, and choices that might drastically change your relationship to certain characters. Don't make it to easy to get close to characters, there should be a lot of potential for fail, as well as the potential to push that very special button that makes everything very easy. In short make the game at large and character interaction a bit more dynamic. It makes for a much more interesting experience, and the game itself more replayable.

Also one thing I think you should add, is interactive sex. Like you get to decide how and perhaps also where you do it, and the actual act would be like a mini-game in itself, where you'd have to worry about making the girl feel good while holding yourself back.
Alternative outcomes here that could affect the game would be fucking awesome.

And something I feel is missing, after having played a lot of these games, is the prospect of actually continuing to date a girl after you've actually nailed her. Having to work it out and keep her happy and basically just trying to keep her. Or ditch her if you don't like her, etc.

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It's nice to see you making a schoolgirl-based VN without weeaboo japanese names.